The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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The line graphs illustrate the

number

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of foreigners and local academics that attended

Austrialian

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Australian

universities between 2001 to 2010.

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, there was

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increase in both groups over the

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the enrolments of local

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was

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higher

comparing

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to the overseas.

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while

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the commencing for non-locals

steadly

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steadily

increased, the locals saw a

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flatuation

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fluctuation

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during the 10

years

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period. In ten 10

years

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overseas

students

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attending Australian universities

quadruaplated

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quadrupled

. The

inicial

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initial

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in 2001, was about 20000 and

this

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number

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reached just above 80000 in 2010. The local

students

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started

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40000 and rose to above 60000 between 2006 and 2007 when it reached

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plateau

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and continued without any

increased

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or decrease till 2010.

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the commencing for foreigners

students

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steadly

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steadily

increase over the

years

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, the local Australians

students

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saw a minimal

flatuation

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fluctuation

with a rise in 2002 to more than 20000

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then

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a decrease to below

this

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number

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and a rise again in 2008 and

subsequently

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a decrease.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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Some people believe that studying at university or collage is the best route to a successful career. While others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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