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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Disciplinary action action is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of disciplinary action action should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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In
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 present scenario, there is a drastic change in the thinking pattern of individuals as compared to bygone days. It is a widely acknowledged fact that these days, it is becoming prominent to teach
children
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 about wrong or right at an early age and discipline is the best action to teach them. I completely agree with
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 statement and discuss how should teachers and parents teach
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 behaviour in the following paragraphs. To commence with,
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 trend has main two reasons why they learn about wrong and right. The first and foremost point is that it is a necessary attribute in one child because it helps take decisions in different life stages
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 as teenage and adults which saves their life from bad influences.
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, when
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 have the ability to distinguish between bad and good
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 it not only helps them become good citizens but
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 encourages them to a responsible person to take care environment
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 their personal life.
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,it will be better in the future to create good relationships among countries and spread positive messages.
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, two best methods of teaching them
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 kind of nature.
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, mother and father are the first schools for young
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 where they learn about good or bad but parents can teach them by showing moral movies and oral stories which leads to increased understanding of bad or good things.
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, in developed countries, guardians have taught them ethical values by watching films with them which makes
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 productive in their studies and work.
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, teachers should teach through group competitions like sports and provide rules where one can learn about team spirit and listen to their elders. In conclusion, I want to say that there are plenty of reasons to teach the right thing's
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 of saving from wrong but it's the responsibility of parents and mentors collectively.
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