In some countries, more and more people are hiring a personal fitness trainer, rather than playing sports or doing exercise classes. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays,
people
do the workout anywhere when they have time. Most
people
believe that doing exercise with a personal
coach
gives higher results for individuals. Personally, I believe
this
is a positive way of
body
development, and in
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I will propose some reasons why
people
should hire trainers. Correct
body
development based on different aspects. First of all, many
people
do exercise wrongly when they go to
gym
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or a kind of class, and it affects reasons for injury.
Moreover
,
body
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development process takes
for
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a long time and it has lower results because training centres and
gym’s
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do not teach diet.
That is
the reason why some
people
are fed up with going
gym
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again and again.
Furthermore
, hiring a private
coach
saves time and money because the
coach
does not dive
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wrong direction.
For example
, Golden
Gym
, which is the biggest in Mongolia, recently announced that 65 per cent of registered
people
spend only 3 months doing exercise and they do not continue to do it because they mostly do not see any good results.
Due to
that reason, the
gym
always suggests a personal
coach
in the first 3 months. For the reasons I mentioned above,
people
must use
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to get the right way of diet and
doing
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the workout.
On the other hand
, whether
people
want to do easy exercises just to prevent from lack of movement, and they do not want to become a person who has lots of muscles, there can enjoy doing exercises on their own.
This
kind of
people
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really does not need a personal trainer and a harsh diet.
To sum up
,
people
go to
gym
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and they can do any kind of workout.
However
, hiring a personal trainer to give you the correct direction and the best result for your
body
in a short duration.
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  • personalized workout plans
  • tailored
  • efficient
  • awareness
  • physical health
  • motivation
  • guidance
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • exclusivity
  • status symbol
  • inaccessible
  • community engagement
  • social interaction
  • health outcomes
  • personal achievement
  • health-conscious
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