Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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throughout the world without considering geographical distances. It seems that modern technology

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into a small universal village.

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as they can communicate with their friends and family members with

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news and allow other

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to connect parents who live in

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on their social

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all the time and do not pay attention to

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normal society. In the past, kids who lived in

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has both advantages and disadvantages and it all

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Introduction & conclusion present

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