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The graph below shows the percentage change in the number of international students graduating from universities different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006

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The bar chart compares eight different areas in Canada in terms of the difference in the proportion of university foreign graduates from 2001 to 2006
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, more international students went to study in Canadian Universities in 2006 than in 2001, and New Brunswick and British Columbia were the two favourite provinces for them in 2006. Between 2001 and 2006, New Brunswick rose by around five per cent from approximately 7% to just under 12%. Nova Scotia followed a similar trend growing from just over 6% to roughly 10%.
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, the most significant change was in British Columbia which began at around 4.5% and finished the period faintly over 10%.
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, the rest of the universities in Canada experienced a small rise of between 2% to 3%, with the exception of Alberta, which witnessed a slight decrease of about 2% from just under 6% in 2001 to just over 4% in 2006.

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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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