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In some countries a large number of graduates are unemployed. What do you think is the cause of this and what measures could be taken to solve the problem?

#countries #graduates #measures
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 majority of
graduates
 are jobless. In
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 will investigate what are the reasons
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this
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then
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 will offer my
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First,
let us explore the reasons of a lot of
graduates
 are jobless. The first prime reason is that the
retirement
age
 is high.
This
 means that the employee cannot retire before completing the
retirement
age
for example
 in Oman the
retirement
age
 is 20 years of working. The second significant reason is that hiring
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foreigners
 more than
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local
workers
. The number of
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 employees is more than local employees. Now, let us turn to the steps to solve
this
 issue. The first prime
solution
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reducing the
retirement
age
. Reducing the
retirement
age
 will give the chance to
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frish
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fresh
graduates
 to find a job easier. The second
solution
 is
that
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hiring
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 local
workers
instead
 of
foreigners
 ( Omanisation ). In conclusion, because a lot of
graduates
 are
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 consequence of the
retirement
age
 is high and hiring
foreigners
 more than
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local
workers
, the
solution
 to the issue is reducing the
retirement
age
 and hiring local
workers
instead
 of
foreigners
.
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