Food travels thousands of miles from producers to customers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people only ate the local food produced by farmers. Advantages and disadvantages.

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thousand of miles from producers to consumers.
This
may lead to environmental and economical problems,
hence
it is better for people to consume local food produced by farmers. Both two cases may carry some advantages and disadvantages either for consumers
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and farming industries. On the one hand, consuming enough nutrients and protein can be taken from
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range of food
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such
as vegetables, fruits, and meat
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which
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are from different regions or
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. To provide
this
food to people, it must be transported very far distance which
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requires
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energy specifically fossil fuel which
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contributes to the increasing air
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pollution
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Although
people can get benefit from
this
process, it
also
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for our environment.
On the other hand
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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