The pie charts provide information about the proportion of three kind of nutrients included in common meals in the USA. These nutrients might be harmful when eaten pretty often.

The pie charts provide information about the proportion of three kind of nutrients included in common meals in the USA. These nutrients might be harmful when eaten pretty often.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The three pie charts provide data on the percentage of sodium, saturated fat and added
sugar
in usual American meals.
It is clear that
dinner includes the biggest amount of different additions. Approximately two-fifths of all consumed sodium and saturated fat are eaten during dinners (43% and 37% respectively).
In addition
, lunches are pretty harmful. Lunch accounts for 29% and 26% of the total
included
Wrong verb form
including
show examples
sodium and saturated fat.
On the other hand
, snacks remain unhealthy
due to
the high content of added
sugar
. Approximately 42% of the total consumed added
sugar
accounted for lunch. Probing
further
, breakfast is the healthier meal in the USA
due to
the law proportion of nutrients included, all the nutrients account for a small minority (from 14 to 16 per cent).
Overall
, dinner is the most harmful meal during the day because of the high amount of different additions included.
Moreover
, snacks are unhealthy
due to
the high amount of added
sugar
.
Submitted by mgshetler on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • nutrients
  • common meals
  • harmful
  • frequently
  • overview
  • comparison
  • prevalent
  • potential health risks
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • tooth decay
  • sodium content
  • high blood pressure
  • kidney issues
  • healthier meal options
  • modifications
  • public health implications
  • dietary habits
  • consumption
  • excessive
  • analysis
  • inspection
What to do next:
Look at other essays: