The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
The bar graph illustrates the global mobile phone
sales
among famous brands over the years, between 2009 and 2013.
Overall
, it can be seen that on the chart are represented five main companies,
such
as Nokia, Apple and ZTE. The graph shows that there are significant differences
among
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the
sales
of these brands. Samsung and Apple increased
steadly
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steadily
steady
over the years, the first achieved 450
million
in 2013 and the second 150
million
. A big result if we look at the starting point of Apple which was less than 50
million
. Unfortunately, Nokia
sales
dropped
drammatically
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dramatically
after 2011
at
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250
million
,
also
LG undergo a
slightly
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decrease. ZTE's
sales
did not change a lot during the years and
also
it
also
recorded the lowest data in the most recent year. The
peack
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peak
of
sales
is achieved by Samsung in 2013 at 45O
million
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global sales
  • Mobile phone brands
  • Market share
  • Trends
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Technological advancements
  • Innovation
  • Consumer preferences
  • Demographics
  • Market dominance
  • Brand loyalty
  • Comparative analysis
  • Sales figures
  • Data interpretation
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