The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

The bar graph illustrates the global mobile phone

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among famous brands over the years, between 2009 and 2013.

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, it can be seen that on the chart are represented five main companies,

such

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as Nokia, Apple and ZTE. The graph shows that there are significant differences

among

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the

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of these brands. Samsung and Apple increased

steadly

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steadily

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over the years, the first achieved 450

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in 2013 and the second 150

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. A big result if we look at the starting point of Apple which was less than 50

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. Unfortunately, Nokia

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dropped

drammatically

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dramatically

after 2011

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250

million

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also

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LG undergo a

slightly

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decrease. ZTE's

sales

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did not change a lot during the years and

also

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also

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recorded the lowest data in the most recent year. The

peack

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peak

sales

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is achieved by Samsung in 2013 at 45O

million

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Mar 15, 2023

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

143 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Global sales
Mobile phone brands
Market share
Trends
Growth
Decline
Technological advancements
Innovation
Consumer preferences
Demographics
Market dominance
Brand loyalty
Comparative analysis
Sales figures
Data interpretation

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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference. Write a letter to a former teacher. In your letter: give details of the job explain why it is important to you suggest what information your teacher could put in the reference

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