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the plan below show the layout of a university's ports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment

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The 2 figures above show the layout of a university's play centre presently and the other shows the picture after its redevelopment.The current area is smaller and future changes will create the location into a spacious centre.
Overall
, the present status of the complex is, it is surrounded by 4 facilities and on the two sides it has outdoor courts on each side.Later changes will make the centre cover with more number of amenities and there will be increasing in no. of the facilities that already exist. Presently the court has a gym on its north and entry from the south which opens to the reception in the same direction after the entrance. To its ,east there is a seating area and
on the other hand
, to its ,west there is a changing room.
However
, there is a pool of 25m in the middle of these utilities. On the two outer sides ie; on the right of the parlour and on the left of the dressing room, there are external fields one on each side.
whereas
, the succeeding idea in the modification of
this
 place is that the utilities will remain the same as it was earlier but with the enlarged number,
for instance
, when someone will take the entrance they will find a sports shop on the left and a cafe on the right which will be the new amenities in
this
 site and
additionally
 two changing rooms one adjacent to the cafe and another next to the sports shop. The outdoor ground is replaced by a game hall on the right and a leisure pool on the left. In
this
 new plan, a pair of dance studios are constructed in the northeast of the playroom. Building new utilities and extensions of the old ones will make
this
 site more attractive and more convenient.
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