The diagram shows how chocolate is produced summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparions where relevant

The diagram shows how chocolate is produced summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparions where relevant
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The diagram illustrates the way in which
cocoa
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beans
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are harvested and how it is
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used in the
process
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of making
chocolate
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. It is
noticable
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noticeable
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that the
process
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of producing
chocolate
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includes ten main steps, beginning with harvesting
cocoa
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beans
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and ending with making liquid
chocolate
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.
In the
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first step in the
process
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of
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chocolate
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production begins with the extraction of white
cocoa
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beans
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from the ripe red pods, which grow directly from
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cocoa
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a cocoa
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tree
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native to South America, Africa and Indonesia. Once collected, the white
cocoa
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beans
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will experience fermentation before sun drying and
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packed into large bags ready to be transported to the factory by train or lorry. At the factory, the dried
beans
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experience a roasting
process
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at a temperature of about 350 degrees
celsius
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,
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crushed and the outer shell removed.
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2 rollers in the machine press the inner parts, in
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way liquid
chocolate
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is produced.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cocoa, beans, process, chocolate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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