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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates spending for
fife
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five
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 different client items(
Cars
, Computers,
Books
, Perfume, Cameras) in
France
 and the
UK
 . The
data
 is measured in thousands in 2010.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the amount of money
spend
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spent
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for
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on
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cars
,
books
 and cameras in the
UK
were
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was
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 higher than the same figure in
France
.
However
, the quantity of money spend
for
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on
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cars
 and
books
 in the
UK
were
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was
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 lower than the same
data
 in
France
. The number of
spend
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for
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on
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cars
 in the
UK
 was bigger by around 50
in contrast
 to the same
data
 for
France
(400).
Furthemore
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Furthermore
, with
this
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,this
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 it took a lead in the graph. More than 100
aparted
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apartment
 the amount of
expending
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expenses
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 for
books
 in the
UK
 from the same
data
 in
France
(300) with the dominance of the former. The quantity of
expending
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expenses
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 for cameras in
UK
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the UK
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 nearly 350 was bigger by about 200 than the same index in
France
. The
spend
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spent
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 money quantity
for
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on
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 computers in
the
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apply
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France
 was
higer
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higher
the
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than the
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 same figure for the
UK
 nearly 350 and 330 respectively.
Following
this
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,this
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 the number of expenditure
for
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on
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 perfume in
France
 was nearly as high as the same index for
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the
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UK
(200).
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, books, france, uk, data with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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