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Some people choose a career according to the social status, or salary. Others choose a career according to their interests. So what do you think is the best wat to choose a career? Give reasons and examples to support your answer.

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There is no denying the fact that the main impact of work is arguable.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that ones must
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choose
 a career depending
to
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on
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 their interests.
However
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,
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the masses
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 argued that people may select their dream career
according to
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 the revenue. From my perspective, I strongly believe an individual must choose
the
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a
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 career
according to
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 their wage and monthly incentives.
This
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 essay will shed light upon why I believe
this
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 and will bring some
life
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 examples. On the one hand, nominating
high
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high-salary
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salary
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 jobs may bring multiple advantages to the folks.
For instance
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, having a high paid job may ease
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individual's
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life
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 as it will not stress the individuals who have many responsibilities
such
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 as paying
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for mortage
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mortage
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mortgage
 or credit card, the person will leave free from
such
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headach
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headaches
 and may
can
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buy a nice spacious home and guarantee a wonderful
life
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 for their offspring.
In contrast
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,
low paid
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 jobs may require extensive treatment
from
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for
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 mental diseases
such
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 as depression as they will always feel uncomfortable about their status and might look at other
folks
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folks'
folk's
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life
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 and compared
it
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them
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 with their
life
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.
Thus
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, it becomes apparent that
high paid
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works
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 would be better than
low paid
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low-paid
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works
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work
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.
In addition
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,
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works
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working
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 with excellent
wage
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wages
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 may increase productivity and competition between folks as they will become eager to work hard and
high
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a high
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salary
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 may embolden them to compete with others in the same field. To illustrate, if the individual found
good
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a good
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 monthly wage, he might prioritize their job over their social
life
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.
Therefore
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, you will see him all the time challenge himself and others to show the best that he
have
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.
Moreover
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,
such
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 achievement may increase bonding between company
employeer
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employer
employees
employee
 as
the
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apply
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success considers
achievement
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an achievement
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 for whole the company. Indeed,
this
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 makes it clear that having
good
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a good
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salary
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 can be more significant than interest. In conclusion, in my opinion, I consider that a high
salary
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 job may be more useful than only interest when ones choose their future
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works
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work
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.
This
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 is because the person who
own
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owns
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 money
,
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 may be able to do anything in his
life
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 without any
life
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 stress.

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