The world should have only one government rather than a national government for each country. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?
The technological advancements in the 21st century have been beyond our wildest expectations, and because of
the
phenomena Correct article usage
apply
such
as the IT revolution, and globalization, the world has converged into a single geography. There are certain benefits and drawbacks to this
, which will be enlisted in this
essay, and finally
concluded by a recommendation.
With the centralization of power, it will become easier to distribute the resources to control
price rises and inflation, thereby eliminating hunger and poverty. For instance
, middle east
countries Replace the word
Eastern
control
their raw materials via centralized control
, hence
the population is least
as compared to the whole world. Replace the word
less
Furthermore
, since the authority is at a single point, therefore
unemployment can be controlled,
because skilled manpower can migrate more freely as per their requirement.
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On the other hand
, it will be a humongous task to make sure the representative of every group is part of the controlling authority, consequently
; the decisions and policies may not be in the interest of minorities. For example
, there is no member parliament from the northeast part of country X, hence
, in the last
10 years, there are
no highways and new industries set up in that region. Wrong verb form
have been
Moreover
, as borders will be
eliminated Wrong verb form
are
then
illegal activities will become easier, because of no border Rephrase
apply
control
procedures.
To conclude
, after evaluating the pros and cons, I am inclined to say that the disadvantages overpower the advantages, so this
should not be implemented. The world today as a separate powerhouse is much better than a single powerhouse.Submitted by vij.vinay on
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task response
Ensure that all aspects of the essay question are addressed fully and develop your ideas and arguments clearly. Make sure to provide a balanced argument by discussing both advantages and disadvantages in more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of the essay by using clear and logical paragraph structures, and ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly introduce and summarize the main points of the essay.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...