Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
countries
choose to build
specilised
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specialised
specialized
facilities
to train top
athletes
in order to achieve international
sports
rather than build
sport
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sports
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facilities
so everyone can
use
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themuse
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.
Although
this
idea some
countries
followed to
benifit
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benefit
them
competing
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in competing
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in international
sports
by
provide
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providing
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top
athletes
with high potential, it may decrease the number of athletic
people
cause of short of
sport
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sports
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facilites
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facilities
that can be used.
This
essay will discuss both
view
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views
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of building
facilties
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facilities
for different
perpuses
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purposes
. International
sports
these days became
high
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a high
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proiatity
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priority
for some
countries
and one of the incomes to the
country
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country's
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economy. In
additon
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addition
,
by
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apply
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building specialised
facilities
it
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apply
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increases the chances of gain
athletes
that have
a
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great potential to compete in international
tourments
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tournaments
.
For example
,
the
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in the
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Olympics each country with a top specialised facility have more chances to achieve and win the gold
medel
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medal
.
Also
, top famous
athletes
may visit some
countries
to use the
facilities
in order to develop a specific skill.
To conclude
,
reasons
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and examples mentioned in
this
paragraph
indicates
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indicate
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the positive development side.
However
, for every positive side in
life
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,life
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there will be always a negative side.
People
in some
countries
duo
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due
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to the lack of
facilities
started to be
more
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apply
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lazy, sleepy, and gain more weight.
Less
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Fewer
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sport
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sports
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facilities
with no specialised factors or offers
it
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apply
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may
loss
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lose
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people
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people's
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intrest
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interested
interest
in training and in
sports
in general. Not only
this
but
also
athletes
people
may stop training if they see there is no positive development in the
sport
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sports
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facilities
.
For example
, in Saudi
Arabia
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,Arabia
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some small
facilities
does
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do
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not have all the equipment
that is
required to train. For these
reasons
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,reasons
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people
will start to be unhealthy and
sport
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sports
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facility will lose their agents. In conclusion, building specialised
facilties
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facilities
to train top
athletes
may have
its
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apply
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benifits
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benefits
for some
countries
in
reach
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reaching
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international
sports
but it may have its
disadvatages
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disadvantages
.
Weather
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Whether
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to provide
for
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apply
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top
athletes
a
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apply
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higly
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highly
unique
facilitles
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facilities
to perform better in
interantional
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international
sports
or build more
sport
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sports
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facility
to
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for
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people
they can use.
Finally
, having top
athletes
in some
countries
helped them to be more known.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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