You have bought some clothing online and are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the company that you bought the clothing from. In your email ·give details of the purchase ·describe the problem ·explain why you need a replacement urgently
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to complain about my recently bought clothes. I purchased some clothes online website at about midday.
To begin
with, I bought two shoes
and one shirt
. Your website has a lot of funny things. The date of the goods delivery is 3rd February 2024.If I am not mistaken the cost is $100. The total cost of the online shop is $120.
When my clothes were come. I have been very funny. Although
,
there were extra Remove the comma
apply
shoes
, when I was wearing a shirt
, the shirt
was large and my shoes
were very small. Then
my father told me to call management.
On the other hand
, I need a shirt
immediately because I need to visit my grandparent's house. So I do my best to exchange or refund money. I explained that, if you did not exchange my shirt
and shoes
, I report an announcement.
I am looking forward to your reply to my letter.
Yours sincerely
RovshanSubmitted by saydusmonovasomiddin94 on
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Task Achievement
To improve task response, ensure your letter includes all required elements: details of the purchase, description of the problem, and explanation for needing a replacement urgently. Your letter briefly mentions these points but lacks detailed explanation and clarity. Be specific about what you bought, clearly describe the issues with the items, and explain why you need a replacement urgently in a more detailed manner.
Coherence & Cohesion
For higher coherence and cohesion, organize your letter into clear, distinct paragraphs: an introduction, details of the purchase, problems encountered, explanation of urgent need for replacement, and a concluding paragraph. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea. This structure will help your letter flow better and make it easier for the reader to understand.
Logical Structure
To enhance the logical structure, use connectors and transition words to link your sentences and paragraphs smoothly. Although some attempt was made, review how to effectively use these elements to guide the reader through your points clearly.
Greeting & Closing
The greeting and closing are formally structured but could be improved by addressing a specific department or individual if possible, and by ensuring the sign-off is appropriately formal. Ensuring properly formatted addresses and signature would further help.
Suitable Writing Tone
Focus on maintaining a suitable writing tone throughout your letter. While your intent to maintain a formal tone is evident, watch for informal expressions or phrases that could detract from the professionalism of the letter. Refrain from threats or overly casual language in a formal complaint.