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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion.

#people #schools #students #abilities
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It is true that school
select
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selecting
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students
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is
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are
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 a matter of great concern.
while
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 people argue that
institute
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 should choose
students
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 through to their academic level,
i
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I
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 concur that it is better to have
students
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 with different
abilities
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 studying together. To be specific,
students
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study
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 with different
abilities
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 studying
togerther
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together
 is better because
the
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apply
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lazy
students
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 can access
to
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apply
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the gifted
students
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 and
then
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 they can help
a
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support.
For
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example
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 when
a
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apply
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lazy
students
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 who
study
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 with
a gifted
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gifted students
a gifted student
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students
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 can help
they
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them
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progress
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 and
then
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 they can be influenced
on
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by
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 gifted
students
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.
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Moreover
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 they can have more
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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 and solutions
how
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on how
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 to
progress
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 and try hard to become
a
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great people like the deskmate who help them make a
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.So it is
a
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an
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 adequate
solutions
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solution
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 to change the personality because they have
a great academic
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a great academic ability
great academic abilities
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abilities
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 but they are lazy persons
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,
schoold
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schools
selects
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selecting
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students
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according to
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 their academic
abilities
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 is a nice way but it is not
a
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the
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 best way because the knowledgeable
students
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study
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studying
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 together is very nice,
whereas
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 the lazy
students
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study
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studying
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 with the bad
students
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 is a bad way and they can fall rapidly
then
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 become a useless person.
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,
the
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apply
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 gifted
students
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 can have more knowledge so that they can apply for more jobs and contribute to the
social
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such
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 as inventions or invest
to
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in
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 more projects and make their country
progress
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 sharply.
While
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 the bad
students
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study
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 together and
they
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apply
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do not want to
study
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 and
then
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 drop out of school.
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Further
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 they become useless
person
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people
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,always depend on others and they can make
high
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a high
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 rate of crime
such
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 as
rober
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robbery
,
mafia
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and mafia
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. In conclusion,
school
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the school
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 should select
students
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 with different
abilities
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studying
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to study
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 together to help people who
is
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are
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 lazy and changed their personality
by
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through
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 gifted
students
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