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Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion

#countries #sports #facilities #train #athletes #development
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One of the most widely discussed issues nowadays is
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 complexes. It is undeniable that
sport
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 has
beceome
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become
 an essential part of our life.
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, there is no absolute agreement on whether
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sport
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 facilities providing should be for only to
train
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 top
athletes
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 or for everyone.
Places
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 like public gyms or fitness centres. A commonly held belief is that countries should provide
for
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only to
train
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 top
sportsmans
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sportsmen
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, like
weight lifting
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weightlifting
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 or
athletes
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. As evidence of
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this
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 they point to ubiquitous and marvellous
athletes
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 who
increase
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sport
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the sport
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 level of all
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country
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countries
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. The
quality
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 of
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country
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the country
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 is
significant
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a significant
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point
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of
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persons
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people
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 who love
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sport
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the sport
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.
Furthermore
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,
olympic
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 medals and rewards are substantial for
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the sportsman
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sportsman
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 own sake and for
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country's
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 popularity. It could be explained by the fact that rewards for
athletes
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also
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increase
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country's
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a country's
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communicate
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quality
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 with other regions.
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, it leads
to
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that upgrading
specilised
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specialised
places
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especially
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 for eminent persons can help produce a trust factor for
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country
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a country
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 that can help in future.
On the other hand
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, some people believe that not only top training facilities should
provided
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, via
places
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 like
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a gym
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gym
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 where every person can have a
train
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 should provide too.
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, they may mention that default citizens and
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sport
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 lovers want to
train
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 and want increasing
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quality
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the quality
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 of their
visit
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visits
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training
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to training
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 centres.
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,
sport
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 is the strong proof
for
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 the tough health of people. The explanation lies in the fact that
sport
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 is key for great health, by the way not only
popularised
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a popularised
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 person can be
master
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a master
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 of
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sport
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the sport
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.
This
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 type of status can be given
for
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to
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any one
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anyone
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, we
are
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do not know what
passerby
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 in street can be in real. Maybe he can be a skilled boxer or
good
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 runner. Kind of
this
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 people can
increase
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country's
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the country's
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sport
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quality
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 too, not only top
atheletes
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athletes
.
Therefore
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, providing
places
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 that can be visited by everyone can help
two-times
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 better than only top
sportsman
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sportsmen
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. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account I would argue that not only
specilised
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specialised
places
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 should provide
and
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 upgrade. Even a default guy who can
increase
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 his skills,
also
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increase
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quality
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the quality
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 of
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country
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the country
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 and maybe can be
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an olympic
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olympic
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Olympic
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 champion.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • specialised facilities
  • train top athletes
  • international sports
  • boost
  • reputation
  • attract
  • sporting events
  • access
  • general public
  • inequality
  • opportunities
  • overemphasis
  • elite sports
  • neglect
  • grassroots development
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