The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and plan future development of the site
The maps depict the Norbiton industrial
area
at the
present and the estimation of refurbishment on the site.
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apply
Overall
, after refurbishment, on
the north side of Change preposition
apply
river
will be a housing Add an article
the river
area
, whereas
on
the Change preposition
apply
southest
Correct your spelling
southeast
southwest
area
will be focused on the residential area
, educational place, and refreshing purposes.
In detail, on the north side of river
will be Add an article
the river
build
a residential Wrong verb form
built
area
which will served
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serve
be served
with
the main road across the Change preposition
apply
river
. Based on the prediction, the government do not destroy any building in this
location.
On the other hand
, on the south
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southern
area
of river
, after being altered into the housing Add an article
the river
area
, the national authorities will altered
the essential focus of the map into recreational, educational, and medical purposes, Change the verb form
alter
such
as markets, playground
, medical Fix the agreement mistake
playgrounds
centre
and schools. The residential place will Fix the agreement mistake
centres
also
developed
after being planned. The government will Change the verb form
be developed
develop
also
add a road circle in
the Change preposition
on
southest
side of the industrial environment.Correct your spelling
southeast
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