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1.Your company has sent you on a three-month course in another country. The course is coming to an end but you would like to prolong your stay. Write a letter to your manager, in your letter: oDescribe how the course has benefited you oExplain why you would like to delay your return oSuggest a date when you would like to come back

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter in regard to extending my stay in Paris after my French Pastry course comes to an end on April 28.
Firstly
, I would like to thank you for sending me on
this
 amazing Pasrty skill programme as it has helped me to refine my skills and has opened me to new possibilities of flavour combinations and recipes for the business. The reason behind postponing my return is that I would like to attend a workshop hosted by the famous baker elina Alford on minimizing wastage and keeping your bakery green. It will be great for our bakery and we can implement some of the information obtained so that we can be more environmentally friendly.
Lastly
, the workshop is for three days starting May 3 to May 6 and I would need a day after that to pack my things and settle the bills. So, I would be returning on May 8 than the original date of May 2nd. I hope you will grant me
this
 permission to extend my stay in Paris. Hoping to hear back from you soon. Yours faithfully, Sonam Mehra.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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