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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

#plans #show #layout #university #sports #centre #redevelopment
The maps illustrate
a
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currently
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 university's
sports
centre
 and how it will look in future after adding some facilities.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 a number of major changes are going to be in the university's
sport
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sports
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centre
. These include developing
sports
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a sports
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 hall, dance studio,cafe and other supporting facilities. At present,
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the
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gym
centre
 is situated
to
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on
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 the north
side
,
while
to
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apply
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the south
side
 has reception. Outdoor courts are
at
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on
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 the right and left
side
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sides
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.
Pool
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 is
at
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in
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 the middle of
sports
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the sports
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centre
 , which is connected
with
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to
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 changing
room
.
Seating
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The seating
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 area is
the
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on the
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 east
side
to
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of
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 the
pool
. In the second
maps
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map
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, it can be seen that in future, to the east
side
 of the
pool
, there are planned to remove
outdoor
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the outdoor
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 courts and will convert
into
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them into
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sports
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a sports
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 hall, two dance
studio
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studios
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 and changing
room
. The changing
room
 will connect to
cafe
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the cafe
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.
However
, to the west
side
 outdoor courts will turn into a leisure
pool
 and the
sports
 shop is going to connect with the leisure
pool
 .
Gym
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The gym
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, changing
room
 , seating area and reception will remain
same
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the same
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 which are around the
pool
, but the gym will expand in future.
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