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Cycling is a healthier and more environmentally friendly form of transport. Nevertheless, cycling is getting less popular. What are the reasons of this trend? What can be done to make cycling more popular?

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In
this
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 era
people
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 tend to use transportation
instead
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 of using
bikes
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,
however
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, pollution can be enhanced by using
bikes
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.
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 essay will analyse the reasons that have made
people
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 follow
this
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 trend and, how
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 issue can be solved. In the vast majority of cases some countries have really hot weather,
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, citizens can not use
bikes
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 because they will get sweat and feel dizzy
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, they prefer to use cars.
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, elderly
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 who are suffering from knee pain are not capable to
cycle
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 for a long time.
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, some countries have not provided for
people
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 on special streets to
cycle
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 on it so, sometimes the citizens Panik about making accidents with other cars.
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, there are a lot of solutions.
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, governments should provide indoor roads with conditions to encourage the community to
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as a result
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, citizens will
cycle
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 more and, that will minimize pollution issues.
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, pedals can be improved by providing technology that can make old
people
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 feel comfortable when they apply
bikes
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. Awareness should be spread by using billboards on streets to remind
people
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 how transportation can affect the environment negatively. In conclusion, I believe that governments have a main impact to make society change their habits in using cars because pollution can be solved by cycling.
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