The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian Cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian Cities.
the chart depicts people's purchasing preferences and drinks customs
last
month in (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisban,
Adelaide
and Hobart) in Australia.
overall
,
habitants
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in all cities -except
Adelaide
- preferred going to a cafe for
coffee
or tea. whilst, in
Adelaide
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the majority had bought instant
coffee
.
On the other hand
, buying fresh
coffee
came
last
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the list of preferences. We can notice that more than 60% of people in Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart went to
coffee
to have drinks. Whistle, in Brisban 55% of the survey candidates choose
going
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to the
coffee
out of other choices, but in
Adelaide
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less than forty per cent of
habitants
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habitats
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choose that choice.
While
,
instead
of that choice, Half of them went with
instant
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the instant
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coffee
option. We observe that having fresh
coffee
was the
last
in all cities. In Sydney, Melbourne and
Hobar
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Hobart
the percentage was about forty.
Whereas
it was less than 35 % in Brisban and
Adelaide
.
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