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nowadys many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization.what might this be the case.what could be the disadvantages of being self-empolyed.

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These days a
lot
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 of people tend to open up their own
business
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 even though it has their own challenges, people are more inclined towards becoming an entrepreneur and having ultimate control over the company than accepting to work under someone else.
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, working for someone can be difficult but I feel it has its own advantages. When a person decides to become self-employed it involves a number of reasons
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 as earning respect, being recognised in society, having a better future and a
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 opening up one's own firm requires a huge investment and a
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 of time and a person might not be able to get time off at their own will if they open up their own
business
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.
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 if they are working for someone they know even if they take a leave it will be paid and the company won't suffer without them. Apart from ,that not every person can be a good employer and not every
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 idea is successful. With a
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 of people becoming influencers and self - employed there is a high rate of competition as for one type of product there are already thousands of competitors sitting in the market. New businesses
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 don't earn profit in the first few years because of
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 the families of the individuals
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 suffer. In conclusion, it is better if one decides to work for an employee as they know they will be paid for their work
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 they would not have to go through the stress which involves whether a
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 is earning a profit, hiring and a
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