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some criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are set free. solutions and reasons

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In recent times, it has been noted that lawbreakers become re-offenders right from prison. The different causes of
this
 will be discussed.
Nevertheless
, there are ways to curb
this
 problem. The first rationale has to do with adapting to society once they are let go. Ex-convicts are unable to fit into the society they knew before imprisonment once they are out
thus
 committing the same crime and
gettingrearrested
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getting arrested
getting rearrested
. Another basis for
this
 occurrence is the issue with employment. No employer wants to accept an ex-convict into their organization which puts financial constraints on the offenders for their basic needs.
As a result
, they commit petty crimes like burglary, and pickpocketing in other to cater for their requirements for daily living.
Furthermore
, the resolutions to these complications lie in the sole jurisdiction of the government. Policymakers should ensure that rehabilitation centres are made readily available in prison centres for offenders to gain access to.
This
 will help them adapt to apply society when they are out. The intensity of punishments should be increased to serve as a deterrent to lawbreakers.
For instance
, the death penalty is for those who commit murder.
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