The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and number of shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and number of shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018 

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates the amount of closing and opening shops in a nation from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, it's noticeable that lines are very fluctuating. The lowest number of shop closures is 500 in 2015 ,
while
the highest number of shop openings is 8,500 in 2011.
According to
the opening graph's trend, it is inconsistent.
Firstly
, in 2011 it was 8,500 but it drops dramatically to 4,000 in 2012.
Then
it continued to rise up to 6,000 between 2012 to 2014.
However
, it went down again to 4,000 in 2015. From 2015 to 2016 the line was pretty remaining the same and it slowly went up to 4,100 in 2017 ,
Lastly
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it directed
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point to 3,000 in 2018.
On the other hand
, the closing trend is
also
highly unstable. In the beginning, it's 6,500 in 2011. After that, it dropped to 4,000 in 2012.
Nevertheless
, it headed up to 7,100 in 2013. Suddenly, it jumped down to 500.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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