There is a problems related to the shop in your community.you reported it times,but it was not solved.write a letter to the manager.

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Dear sir I am writing

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letter to complain about the horrible situation of the barn in our community. I was searching for a market to rent a long time ago because I wanted to open a grocery store.I got

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market two days ago.but when I came to the market,the shop was

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condition.I saw

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shop in a completely different way online.There are many of trash,useless boxes, and other things.The shop needed to be repaired because there was a fungal attack on the bottom part of the door and the windows were broken,the roof in unusable condition.

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we repeated requests to the local authorities to repair the chain,they ignored our appeal. So,I have no choice but to write to you.I request you to repair the cache at the earliest. Yours sincerely, Billura

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task achievement

Make sure to provide a clear introduction that outlines the purpose of your letter.

coherence and cohesion

Try to use a more structured approach for each paragraph, ensuring one main idea per paragraph.

coherence and cohesion

Be careful with grammar and word choice to improve clarity, such as 'the shop was in tragic condition' instead of 'the shop was tragic condition'.

task achievement

You addressed the issue clearly and expressed your concerns about the condition of the shop.

coherence and cohesion

Your closing statement was respectful and appropriate for a formal letter.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

135 words

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