Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people believe that the extinction of flora and fauna is our main environmental issue. Meanwhile, the rest contradicted the idea and agreed that we have to pay more attention to other environmental problems. I think global warming and climate change bring more major impacts rather
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the reduction of creature species. As greenhouse gas emissions blanket the Earth, they trap the sun’s heat.
This
leads to global warming and climate change. The world is now warming faster than at any point in recorded history.
For instance
, Australia experienced extreme heat until it fired the woods area. As
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result, many
animals
and plants were burned dead.
Furthermore
, the South and North Pole glacier has been melting gradually and scientists found ancient viruses that have been trapped inside the ice for years
as a consequence
of the melting process. Researchers are now trying to assess them which may harm living creatures, even human beings. All of these causes
then
will lead to another problem, which is the reduction of species diversity. The variety of plants and
animals
has been deducted regularly and environmental change has contributed to it. As their habitats are destructed, food sources are reduced as well
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starving them to death.
For example
, the burning woods in Australia will not only
vanish
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their vegetation but
also
the herbivore
animals
since their food is gone. The
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then
starved since their prey
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not exist.
Moreover
, the forest fires probably scorched some rare
animals
and plants as well.
To sum up
, global warming is the most important thing to consider since it
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many other matters, and flora and fauna extinction is one of them.
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Task Response
Ensure that the essay fully addresses the given prompt by discussing both views and giving your own opinion. Also, provide a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points of the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is clear, but the introduction and conclusion could be more developed to provide a stronger framework for the main points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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