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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values)

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The provided line graph illustrates the acid
level
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 in the mouth which is created by consuming sweet foods specifically
sugar
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 and honey and the possibility of
tooth
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 decay because of
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 acid
level
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. As is presented in the line graph, the higher the acid
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 the lower the
pH
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 value and a
pH
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level
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 less than 5.5 is detrimental to the
tooth
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 and causes
tooth
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 decay. The given graph shows that the initial
pH
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level
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 of our mouth is 7 which begins to fall after consuming sweet foods. When we eat sweet item like cane
sugar
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, the
pH
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level
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 drops to 3.5 after 5
minutes
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 and remain in danger
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 (below
pH
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level
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 5.5) for more than 30
minutes
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. Consuming fruit
sugar
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 drops the
pH
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level
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 nearly to 4 and remains at danger
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 for about 20
minutes
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. And
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, when we eat honey, the
pH
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level
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 falls below 5 and it remains under risk
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 for about 13
minutes
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.
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, As the low
pH
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level
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 means higher acidity and causes
tooth
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 decay, cane
sugar
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 among the mentioned three food items is the most harmful to our teeth.
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