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Some people believe that car-free days are effective ways to reduce air pollution. However, others argue that there are other ways that are more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
pollution
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 is one of the main problems in the world,particularly
air
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pollution
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 since not only
people
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 but
also
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 animals are suffering from that issue.
According to
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 some
people
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's opinion,instituting
car-free
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days
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 can be
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 effective way to reduce
air
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pollution
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,
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others argue that there are other more effective
methods
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 for that.In
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 I will discuss both points of view. In order to decrease
air
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pollution
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 some
people
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 consider that they should begin
car-free
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days
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 since they think if
people
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 do that at least once a week, the atmosphere will be less polluted and the noise
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 declines.The more the government encourages
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,the more the
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 and streets will be clean as well.
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,the
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 is so polluted today,you can see dust and toxic in some streets of countries.I think
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those can be useful and solve a problem a bit, but there may be other more efficient ways for that
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 as planting a lot of trees
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 the edges of streets.
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,there are other
people
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 who consider
car-free
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days
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 cannot be productive,
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 there are other useful
methods
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.These
people
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 think that today we cannot stop using
cars
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 because there may be different occasions
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,
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delivering somebody to the hospital immediately.In
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situations
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people
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 have to use
cars
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 that faster way of reaching
to
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the location.
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,they think that the
air
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 may be clean in some percentage for a day,yet
then
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 it starts being polluted again in the next
days
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.In my opinion, we should use other
methods
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 for tackling
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 issue.The government should institute utilizing electro or solar power
cars
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 because they pollute the
air
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 less and are environmentally friendly. In conclusion,
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although
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car-free
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days
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 are
also
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efficient
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an efficient
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 way to reduce
air
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pollution
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.I think we should apply other
methods
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 that are more efficient and convenient since we cannot refuse
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cars
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 even for a day.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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