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Some people have the same type of job throughout their life while others prefer to change the type of job. What’s your opinion

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many are sick to the same job for a long period where
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like to change,because working in the same company for a long period,the recognition ,would be less and wages will not be increased very less percentage of increment they get,for
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as per company norms ,they may increase the wages only 12 % from
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 CTC ,that will not give much impact on it,where express is increased, wages and expanse are unable to
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, if talk about changing
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jobs very often is a great option,so that
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 know different work cultures, and growth in the career will be having advancement,and
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 when switching the job ,we may get a 30 to 50%
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 CTC ,it will vary from organisation to organization, few may give added advantages like joining bonus and advance leaves Exetra,
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:A person worked in the organization for 3years ,swtiching the company would be great option as per my opinion. Here some people grow step by step ,where managers recognise their hard work and talent wich they preseted on assigned task, appriciation would be best medicine to attract employee, so they never think of changing the job forn long time, recognition of work and will be appriciated.
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