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In some area of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of door after particular time at night unless they accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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Restrictions have been mounted on children in their teens during specific odd hours at some designated places and are not allowed to move around unless they are escorted by an older person in the US.
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 is a very good initiative in my opinion and
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,I shall elucidate my viewpoint on the statement given in my forthcoming paragraphs. Imposing curfews on the life of the child during specific hours is very crucial to submerge them from getting
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 bad peers who do dangerous activities at night.
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 is because,
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 teenagers are allowed to be very versatile there is
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 a need for them to be checked in order to prevent them from going astray.
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,
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 strategy will help social problems found in society during the youthful stages of life
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 as prostitution, arm robbery and many others subjecting them to unwarranted places including prisons.Recently in the Brooklyn news, there has been a wide reportage of approximately 79% of Adolescents seen to be indulging in unhealthy practices and
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 was so because they were left outside at night .
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, when teenagers are curfewed and they are not allowed to go out bettering it out with escorts from carers, their identity and protection are safe on the maximum level. They wouldn't be harmed by any perpetrator. Even though they might come close to the adolescent, the parent may find various means to help the child from being harmed.
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 strategy is best seen when girls were restricted from coming out in the Northern part of the region in Ghana. Convulsively, I think in order for teenagers to be protected and halt dangerous behavioural activities there is a need for placing bans at night.
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