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The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.

The bar chart shows the numbers of cars per 1000 people in 5 European countries in three years and compaire with European everages.
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The bar chart gives information about the
quantity
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number
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 of
cars
 per thousand people in five regions of Europe certainly in the years
of
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apply
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2005, 2009 and 2015.
Overall
, the count of
cars
 significantly varies
amidst
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among
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 all the countries. As well, each
country
 except the third does not have a strong tendency and fluctuations are viewed.
Also
,
Country
 4 maintains a constant car volume in
the
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all three
rime
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time
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 periods.
Second
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The second
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 and third union shows a small negative trend from 2009 to 2015. What is more, the first
country
 represents a huge positive change
on
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in
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 about 100
cars
 from 2005 to 2009 and
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 negative reduction from 2009 to 2015. The third union is the one
who
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that
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 has a strong negative tendency.
Then
,
country
 5 is the main host of
cars
 per 1000 people and it has a small decrement from 2005 to 2009 which turns
to
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vast
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a vast
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 augmentation between 2009 and 2015.
Therefore
, the number of average
cars
 depends more
from
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on
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 the fifth sector because of the enormous car quantity maintained
comparing
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compared
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 to other countries.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Average
  • Comparison
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Dip
  • Outperform
  • Lag behind
  • Demographic factors
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Mobility demand
  • Environmental concerns
  • Policy implications
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