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Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resource while others think that it is essential for mankind to continue to explore the universe in which we live.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #space #exploration #waste #resource #mankind #universe
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Some
people
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 believe that exploring
space
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 is useless plus it consumes a significant amount of resources,
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 others believe that it is necessary for human development as we will be more educated about the world we are living in. In my point of view, I completely agree with the second opinion because the world is a huge place where we have not discovered even half of it.
This
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 essay will investigate both opinions and discuss why I am inclined toward the second
one
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. On the
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 hand, it can be argued that
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 exploration is not important as medicine and other majors' development.
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, sending
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 to
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 is quite a risky and dangerous job.
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, astronauts may be lost there
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 of losing contact with
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 on earth.
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, astronauts' suites are not safe and secure enough to face
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 dangers’.
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, spaceships and rockets require a substantial amount of power, gas and oil which can be used in numerous places on the earth
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 of just using all these resources for only a few things.
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, exploring
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 will expand our science and education in the near future.
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 of the key benefits of
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 exploration is that it will increase job opportunities for young
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 and new generations.
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, no
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 can deny that it can be a new income source for the country,
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 ,sadly our world becomes a dangerous place so we should find an alternative place where we can live in.
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, I would like to reiterate my opinion that
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 exploration advantages seem to predominate over the disadvantages so we should educate more about it.
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