Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both side and give your opinion.
The health of the
juvenile’s
is suffering Change the noun form
juveniles
juvenile
due to
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increase
of fat in them. Some Correct article usage
the increase
people
think that the Use synonyms
Nation
authority is responsible for Change noun form
Nation's
such
consequences, Linking Words
while
others think that the Linking Words
parents
should have taken care Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
of
this
.
The lack of proper inspection by Linking Words
food
control authority have created drastic change Use synonyms
on
the lifestyle of Change preposition
in
children’s
and as per Change noun form
children
people
they should be held answerable. Even thoughUse synonyms
,
The government has established Remove the comma
apply
Use synonyms
food
control Correct article usage
a food
department
Fix the agreement mistake
departments
at
every country, unhealthy items still can be seen in shops. Change preposition
in
This
uncontrollable governance has created multiple changes in youth metabolism. Linking Words
For instance
, in Pakistan, Linking Words
people
are selling unhygienic cuisine in carts on Use synonyms
roads
and using very dangerous ingredients. Correct article usage
the roads
Consequently
, Linking Words
Food
poisoning has become common everywhere Use synonyms
due to
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unavailability
of government support.
Correct article usage
the unavailability
On the other hand
, Linking Words
Parents
have ignored their Use synonyms
Use synonyms
child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
due to
their hectic routine and few Linking Words
people
think that it is a cause of obesity. Since Use synonyms
parents
are a caretaker of their Use synonyms
Use synonyms
child
, it is Fix the agreement mistake
children
a
duty to interact Change the word
their
and
suggest Change preposition
with and
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
about
healthy Change preposition
apply
routine
. Because juveniles during their early time coordinate with several other Fix the agreement mistake
routines
people
and start opting Use synonyms
eating
habits from them. Change preposition
for eating
For example
, if the Linking Words
parents
convey about severe effects of consuming unhealthy fast Use synonyms
food
, their Use synonyms
child
will not be diverted towards getting Use synonyms
injurious
Add an article
an injurious
the injurious
meal
. So, it is Fix the agreement mistake
meals
a
duty of Correct article usage
the
parents
to make close contact and keep an eye on their children so that they can control their diet.
Use synonyms
To conclude
, Linking Words
although
government and Linking Words
parents
both must handle the children’s routine, in my opinion, Use synonyms
children’s
spend most of Change noun form
children
the
time with their Change the word
their
parents
. If Use synonyms
parents
pay attention towards their Use synonyms
Use synonyms
child
, they will not be able to get into Fix the agreement mistake
children
Linking Words
such
Add an article
a such
unhealthy
Correct article usage
an unhealthy
routine
.Fix the agreement mistake
routines
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