Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both side and give your opinion.
The health of the
juvenile’s
is suffering Change the noun form
juveniles
juvenile
due to
increase
of fat in them. Some Correct article usage
the increase
people
think that the Nation
authority is responsible for Change noun form
Nation's
such
consequences, while
others think that the parents
should have taken care for
Change preposition
of
this
.
The lack of proper inspection by food
control authority have created drastic change on
the lifestyle of Change preposition
in
children’s
and as per Change noun form
children
people
they should be held answerable. Even though,
The government has established Remove the comma
apply
food
control Correct article usage
a food
department
Fix the agreement mistake
departments
at
every country, unhealthy items still can be seen in shops. Change preposition
in
This
uncontrollable governance has created multiple changes in youth metabolism. For instance
, in Pakistan, people
are selling unhygienic cuisine in carts on roads
and using very dangerous ingredients. Correct article usage
the roads
Consequently
, Food
poisoning has become common everywhere due to
unavailability
of government support.
Correct article usage
the unavailability
On the other hand
, Parents
have ignored their child
Fix the agreement mistake
children
due to
their hectic routine and few people
think that it is a cause of obesity. Since parents
are a caretaker of their child
, it is Fix the agreement mistake
children
a
duty to interact Change the word
their
and
suggest Change preposition
with and
them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
about
healthy Change preposition
apply
routine
. Because juveniles during their early time coordinate with several other Fix the agreement mistake
routines
people
and start opting eating
habits from them. Change preposition
for eating
For example
, if the parents
convey about severe effects of consuming unhealthy fast food
, their child
will not be diverted towards getting injurious
Add an article
an injurious
the injurious
meal
. So, it is Fix the agreement mistake
meals
a
duty of Correct article usage
the
parents
to make close contact and keep an eye on their children so that they can control their diet.
To conclude
, although
government and parents
both must handle the children’s routine, in my opinion, children’s
spend most of Change noun form
children
the
time with their Change the word
their
parents
. If parents
pay attention towards their child
, they will not be able to get into Fix the agreement mistake
children
such
Add an article
a such
unhealthy
Correct article usage
an unhealthy
routine
.Fix the agreement mistake
routines
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