as countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the advantage of this trend for individuals outweigh its disadvantages for the environment?

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Nowadays, a growing number of households own at least one car as living standards improve.
The vehicle
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ownership has
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benefit
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benefits
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as bringing convenience to life,
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, its drawbacks, like causing traffic
jam
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and air pollution, outweigh its advantages.
People
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can live more conveniently with
a
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automobile at hand.
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, whoever has
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auto can go
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anywhere he wants at any time he likes, without being restricted by the schedule of public transport.
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, before I bought a motor vehicle, I
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had to get up at 6:00 each morning to catch the bus at 6:30 in order to go to work without being late. There were ten stops on the way and the whole trip costed about 30 minutes.
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, after I bought a Volkswagen SUV, I could get up at 6:40 and drove nonstop to my workplace within 20 minutes.
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self-driving gives
people
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more freedom in terms of travelling, it causes more problems to society, like road congestion and environmental problems.
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to say, the increasing number of private cars cannot go through the roads at one time and theirs exhaust gas causes air pollution.
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, most
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in Shanghai, a metropolitan city in China, afford to buy their own cars.
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, the transport infrastructures there have limited capacity and cannot handle too many motor vehicles in rush hours.
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spend more time waiting
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.
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, emission of particles into the air which are detrimental to the environment and
people
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’s health. Obviously, we shouldn’t seek convenience at the cost of sustainable development and long-term interest. In conclusion, increasing car ownership could overwhelm transport facilities and cause serious environmental problems,
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causing more harms than benefits.
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