Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. do you agree or disagree? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

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It cannot be argued that Hollywood

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produce

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the best

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in the

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two decades, which are highly consumed by people around the world. Many

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experts in my country, Indonesia, believe that

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phenomenon does

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happen here. It truly has a negative effect

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the enthusiasm of the people in watching the local

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at the cinema since they prefer to watch foreign films. I agree with these experts and I will elaborate on my reasons below.

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with, in my opinion, scriptwriters abroad have the more creative ability

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up an interesting storyline.

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, they could give us, the

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lovers, a beautiful plot twist ending that could give us goosebumps.

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, they will make us even more excited to look forward to the sequel of the stories, if the stories have not been finished yet.

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, the local action

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are edited in low quality so people could not enjoy the cinematic.

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definitely would not happen whenever we watch action

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from Hollywood

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, especially in all of Marvel's

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. For

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particular reason, the government could actually help by giving opportunities to any potential crews in the film industry to study abroad and learn from the master.

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, our

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's quality is still under the standard.

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, as a developing country, we still can grow our

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industry as long as we

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the right attempt and keep up the perseverance. The government

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play a crucial part in shaping the future in terms of giving access to high-quality education abroad.

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Task Achievement

Ensure that the points presented are balanced and address both sides of the statement, as the question asks whether you agree or disagree, and also whether governments should support local industries. Your essay primarily provides reasons for the preference for foreign films.

Task Achievement

Work on providing specific examples to support your main points better. You mentioned the quality of action movies and education abroad but did not give concrete examples to illustrate these points sufficiently.

Coherence and Cohesion

Your essay maintains a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, you can improve the logical flow by adding transitional phrases between ideas, ensuring a more cohesive link between paragraphs.

Coherence and Cohesion

Improve paragraph development by giving equal attention to the two different aspects of the question. The part about government support for local industries needs further elaboration for a more coherent argument.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

foreign films
locally produced films
big-budget
production values
exposure
cultural heritage
local talent
financial incentives
economic growth
government support
compete
preserve
promote
audience
settings
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