Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced films. do you agree or disagree? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?
It cannot be argued that Hollywood
does
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has
produce
the best Wrong verb form
produced
movies
in the last
two decades, which are highly consumed by people around the world. Many movie
experts in my country, Indonesia, believe that this
phenomenon does also
happen here. It truly has a negative effect due to
the enthusiasm of the people in watching the local movies
at the cinema since they prefer to watch foreign films. I agree with these experts and I will elaborate on my reasons below.
To begin
with, in my opinion, scriptwriters abroad have the more creative ability in making
up an interesting storyline. Change preposition
to make
For example
, they could give us, the movie
lovers, a beautiful plot twist ending that could give us goosebumps. Moreover
, they will make us even more excited to look forward to the sequel of the stories, if the stories have not been finished yet.
Furthermore
, the local action movies
are edited in low quality so people could not enjoy the cinematic. This
definitely would not happen whenever we watch action movies
from Hollywood production
, especially in all of Marvel's Fix the agreement mistake
productions
movies
. For this
particular reason, the government could actually help by giving opportunities to any potential crews in the film industry to study abroad and learn from the master. Otherwise
, our movie
's quality is still under the standard.
To sum up
, as a developing country, we still can grow our movie
industry as long as we have
the right attempt and keep up the perseverance. The government Verb problem
make
also
play a crucial part in shaping the future in terms of giving access to high-quality education abroad.Submitted by lagum on
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Task Achievement
Ensure that the points presented are balanced and address both sides of the statement, as the question asks whether you agree or disagree, and also whether governments should support local industries. Your essay primarily provides reasons for the preference for foreign films.
Task Achievement
Work on providing specific examples to support your main points better. You mentioned the quality of action movies and education abroad but did not give concrete examples to illustrate these points sufficiently.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay maintains a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, you can improve the logical flow by adding transitional phrases between ideas, ensuring a more cohesive link between paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve paragraph development by giving equal attention to the two different aspects of the question. The part about government support for local industries needs further elaboration for a more coherent argument.