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Many people these days travel far for work or spend more hours working. Does this trend have more advantages or disadvantages? What do you think about work-life balance?

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Nowadays, more and more people need to commute from and to work by spending a lot of hours on the road, and,
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, they might spend more
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 at their working place rather than before. In my perspective, the negatives of
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 growing trend outweigh the positives, and,
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this
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 reason, it is extremely important to balance work
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 and leisure
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 with, working intensively on assignments means that people will consume more of their
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 for their occupation. By spending extra
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 at the office, employees will not have any leisure
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 with their relatives and friends.
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, people may become workaholics and,
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, neglect their families in order to finish their tasks.
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, putting too much effort into work could lead to serious mental illnesses like stress or depression too.
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, work-life balance plays a crucial role in human life
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 health.
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, a balanced schedule means employees will be happier, healthier and more satisfied.
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, it improves workers' productivity.
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, when someone has more
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 fund, he can spend it with his family and do some leisure activities.
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, parents can take their children to the park or entertainment facilities in their free
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.
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, the bond between parents and their kids will grow stronger as well. In conclusion,
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 working for too many hours may lead to an imbalanced life and create major problems for our health, so employees must arrange their working schedule in order to have some
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 for themselves and,
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, relieve stress.
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