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Increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution. What other measures should be adopted. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
Nowadays, rural areas have become polluted
due to
 the high demand in using private
cars
, and
this
 has led to resource depletion because of the high usage of
petrol
.
Thus
,
this
 has made our cities polluted.
Although
 some
people
 believe that increasing the gas
rate
 could be the best way to tackle
this
 problem, I strongly disagree with
this
 statement, and in
this
 essay, I will argue why
this
 way is not the case for solving
this
 problem.
To begin
, some believe that by increasing the
rate
 of
petrol
, there would be less
pollution
 and
traffic
. Over the past years, the
rate
 of gas has increased significantly, but using private
cars
 has not changed in the way that was expected.
This
 solution might be temporary, and after a
while
,
people
 get used to it.
Then
, they tend to use their private
cars
 again.
However
, from my point of view, increasing in
petrol
 price is not fair because it puts a lot of pressure on
people
 who have a lower income, and their welfare will be eradicated.
Furthermore
, loads of goods and products have been transported by
cars
 and trucks recently, and
this
 increase has an adverse effect on the prices of products because the
rate
 of
petrol
 is high, and it is not worth it to carry out goods at that
rate
. So, the price of products will be increased. There are several ways to tackle
traffic
 congestion and air
pollution
 which I believe both governments and individuals can take into.
Firstly
, the government can provide convenient facilities and safe public transportation for nearly all
people
 in big cities.
Therefore
,
people
 tend to use public transportation
instead
 of their private
cars
, It leads to lower
traffic
 and noise
pollution
that is
 made by emissions of CO2.
Also
, individuals can pay more money to use electric
cars
instead
 of those
cars
 using fossil fuels.
To sum up
, some
people
 think by increasing the price of
petrol
, air
pollution
 and
traffic
 will be decreased.
However
, I believe
that is
 not the case. Governments and individuals can participate in lowering
traffic
 and
pollution
 caused by private
cars
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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