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Restoration of old buildings in main cities involves enormous government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to spend this money to build new houses and roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Live attenuated refers to a microorganism
that is
 still alive but has
underwent
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 serial transmission in environments
has
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 been created via genetic modification. In order to trigger an immunological response, live vaccinations must multiply. The principles governing the timing and spacing of live vaccines are influenced by
the
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several conditions that can prevent replication. Certain vaccinations (
such
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 Jynneos Smallpox/Monkeypox vaccine) are referred to as "live attenuated." 3. A mother brings her
14 month old
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 son in for his vaccinations. He receives
a measles
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the measles
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 (rubeola) vaccine. The following day the mother calls back and says that the vaccine gave her son measles. He has a
low grade
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 fever (37.5 tympanic),
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mild rash, the injection site is slightly erythematous and tender, and he is a little fussier than usual. What should the advanced practice nurse say to the mother? Include all pertinent parent/patient teaching. Children can experience moderate side effects following immunizations,
such
 as soreness at the injection site, a rash, or a fever. These common reactions will fade fast. Apply a cool, wet cloth to minimize redness, discomfort, and/or swelling at the injection site to treat moderate vaccination responses. Use a cool sponge to lower
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. Use painkillers other than aspirin.
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