The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.

The bar charts below provide information about percentages of students who are proficient in foreign language in different countries.
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The bar chart illustrates the data about percentages of
students
surrounding males and females who are proficient in
a foreign languages
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a foreign language
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in several countries .
Overall
, the
students
of Romania and
India
rates were the highest , Followed by
Russia
and
Vietnam
and
thirdly
China
and Thailand .
India
experienced the most significant increase ,
while
China
's rates were the lowest among the six countries . On average ,
India
in approximately 68% of
students
master
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a foreign language.After that, Romania with a proportion of 65% with a decrease slightly compared with
India
.After that ,
Vietnam
with a rate of 57% ,
then
,
Russia
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% with a fall gradually comparing with
Russia
and Lately , between Thailand and
China
with a percentage of 32% which fluctuated ,
then
declined steadily. In
this
figure,the rates of
students
in both
Russia
and
Vietnam
have reached a peak with
the
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abundance of females than males , followed by the rate
of
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Vietnam
and
Russia
which dropped considerably .
Therefore
, in each of
China
and
Thailand
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they attained a maximum of only 32% with the dominance of females.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, india, russia, vietnam, china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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