The plans below show a public park when it was first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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The given map illustrated a public
park
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in modern
time
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and when it first opened in 1920.
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it can be clearly seen from the given map that the
was
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a lot of changes.
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, in 1920 east part of
public
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the public
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park
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was more different than today. Rose
garden
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which
located
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is located
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in the
north east
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northeast
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part of
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park
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the park
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was
removement
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movement
.
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of
this
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their built cafe.
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Secondly
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Fonds
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for water plants
demolished
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were demolished
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and now there
are
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children's play
area
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.
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seats and Glasshouse which
located
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in the southeast part of
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park
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the park
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was
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destroyed and there was built water feature.
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,
Rose
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the Rose
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garden
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in
northwest
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the northwest
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didn't change. Their removed three seats,
Rose
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a Rose
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garden
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in
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the south
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south west
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south-west
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,
stage
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a stage
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for musicians and
instead
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of
this
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built
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an amphithealthe
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amphithealthe
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amphitheatre
for concerts. And Fountain
where
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which
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was in
centre
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the centre
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their destroyed and replaced Rose
garden
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and 4 seats which
was
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were
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demolished
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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