There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the of mobile phone. What form do they take? Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of mobile phone.qq,

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the
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recent years, it is thought that mobile
phone
leads to social, medical and technical issues, it's either in the form of
feature
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or application. In my opinion, I strongly agree that mobile
phone
provides
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plenty number of benefits rather than
its
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drawbacks, and
this
essay will explore more about these reasons below.
To begin
with,
people
use
mobile
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phone
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in order to acquire much more information that they need, mainly which is related to their daily
life
.
For instance
,
people
who work as doctors mostly utilize their mobile
phone
app
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such
as Whatsapp as a platform for their patients to consult about the diseases they have. In an emergency circumstance, the patients are able to chat with their doctor to obtain
the
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crisis
aids
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.
Thus
, the existence of mobile
phone
in the form of its apps
are
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beneficial for medical purposes.
Secondly
, not only
mobiles
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phones are useful in one particular aspect of
life
, but
also
it is considered to bring
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social
life
. One of the obvious examples is when
people
feel effortless to communicate with their old partners
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they have never met before. After getting in touch with their previous partners by using Messanger for their communication feature, they are able to arrange the meeting to catch up together and enjoy their time.
As a result
,
this
simple social
life
would not be achieved easily if
people
did not have mobile phones. In
conlusion
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conclusion
,
mobile
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phone
is a functional thing that can be used by most
of
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people
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all over the globe.
Furthermore
, the benefits of having mobile phones outweigh the drawbacks as
it
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can be used in any kind of
conditions
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condition
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.
This
tendency will grow up increasingly in the future because mobile
phone
becomes an essential need of human living.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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