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The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the process of making matches. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram explains the way in which matches are made,
its
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their
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 phases, and the machine used in making
such
.
Overall
, there are 9-10 stages, starting with
peeling
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the peeling
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 of the log, drying and up to the packaging area.
To begin
, the log will be peeled by a veneer with
blade
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a blade
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 and will turn into tiny pieces by chopping. After that, it will be soaked
to
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in
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 a tank with ammonium phosphate and drying will follow. From the dryer, a hopper will catch the dried materials
then
 wIll be pushed by a blower to a metal duct until
it
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they
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 reached the
storag
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storage
 area. After it has been stored,
they
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it
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 will be inserted
to
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into
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steel
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a steel
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 belt with holes. In
this
 process, the matches will undergo to three different tanks for dipping,
that
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which
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 consists of paraffin wax, based chemicals, and tip chemicals
respectvely
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respectively
.
Finally
, the matchsticks
is
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are
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 ready for final drying and
then
 go
the
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to the
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 area of packaging.
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