In many countries people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways,what are the causes and how can it be solved?

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are not much active in their daily life or choose to sit for longer periods, they are at high risk of getting obese and

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must be encouraged to take part in

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is evident that

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are more active when they indulge themselves in any kind of exercise like jogging or walking.

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, individuals who maintain their ideal body weight

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their own BMI tend to have

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disease conditions.

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, the public must read all the food contents before they purchase.

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. In conclusion, numerous remedies can be posed in order to deal with the

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problems associated with unhealthy ways adopted by humans.

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In many countries people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways,what are the causes and how can it be solved?

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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that interviewsm is not a reliable method of choosing whom to employ and there are other better methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In order to solve traffic problems government should tax private cars owners heavily and use the money to improve public transport. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

some people think that manufactures and shopping malls should sell fewer packaged products while other argue that people have the responbility to buy products with less packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.