The chart below shows the changes that took places in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 -2012

The chart below shows the changes that took places in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003 -2012
The line chart illustrates the number of
the
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incident as the rate of
crime
in three different
cases
namely
bulgary
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burglary
Bulgaria
bulgar
,
car
theft
, and robbery in the Newport city centre from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, the rate of
bulgary
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burglary
biliary
bulgar
declined significantly replaced by
car
theft
where as robbery shows
steady
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trend.
Bulgary
was the dominant
crime
at the beginning of the period,
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took
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rates
over
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3000 incidents reached its peak in 2004 which was 3800
cases
as
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the highest number of
crime
rates over the
periods
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, but it continue
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with approximately 1300
cases
in
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the end of
period
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.
However
, in
the
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2007, its trend was
change
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where
car
theft
was higher than
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in bulgary
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bulgary
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Bulgaria
bulgar
burglary
with approximately 2100 and 1600 respectively. With regards to the remaining two incidents,
car
theft
was a steady level of
crime
from 2003 to 2004 and got reduced in
next
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5 years from approximately 2700 up to 2250. The number
then
increased to 2700 in 2012. Robbery reached 900
cases
in 2005
then
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continue
become
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stable
untill
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until
the end of
period
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the period
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.
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