In the past important knowledge of culture and history was stored in the museums. Nowadays information is freely available on the internet therefore is no need of museums. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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that the

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us 100% like museums. We can not live in a world

whitout

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without

history and culture, if we lost

this

for

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the

internet

, I am afraid

for

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what is gonna

happaned

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happen

happened

. In my opinion,is

extremelly

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extremely

important, for the next generations, do not

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the museums

desapear

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disappear

because of

internet

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the internet

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Firstly

, I know the

internet

grow

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a lot

everyday

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and it is easier for

evebody

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everybody

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access to rich content about culture and history, on the

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, in the

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museum

you

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another type of

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experience

and perspective. When the kids go to the museum for learning something about the past, I am sure they get more

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and excited, they can see closer and touch sometimes, with

internet

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they can not do

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place to go

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see

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artist

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like Leonardo da Vinci or Portinari, or a simple

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for a local artist,

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is gonna be a disaster for the next generation. The arts, paints,

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will be just a

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picture

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one screen, we will

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the value, the feeling of

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trough

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museum

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, and

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our history.

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, I

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the

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we have the duty to protect everything that

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for the people who

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here first. We can not lose for the digital,

internet

is good,

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connect

people, but have your limit, and

this

limit is the

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. So, I think

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both could work together, putting

internet

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the internet

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inside the museums,

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integrations, that will be a good plan

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my perspective.

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