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More developing countries are given aid from international organziations to help them in their development plans. Some people argue that financial aid is important but others suggest that practical aid and advice are more important. Discuss both views and give your opinio

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 day and age,it is widely recognized that the majority of
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the less economic
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 improving
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their infrastructure and living standards.
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,
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section
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 of civilians think that
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financial support is paramount,but
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 thought that more practical help and valuable suggestion are very significant.In the forthcoming paragraphs,
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 will discuss both
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views and eventually
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 will provide my opinion. To commence with,
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 these days numerous multinational
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 are providing special economical aid to developing states.
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 a recent survey by Oxford University on international aid by various giant organizations to less developed
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.They revealed that would help their
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 both economically
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job opportunities.
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 would bring a plethora of benefits
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 as enhancing their health sectors and educational institutes,
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 it would create a lot of employment for their young generation and the economic standards would be upward.
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,Loas has been getting financial aid from the USA for 10 years, and because of
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 the nation's growth is raised
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 few years.
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,mainly they developed their tourism sector and good infrastructure,these two things have brought a huge amount of income from tourists.
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,a ton of
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 already started their new branches in that nation,so it has boosted their GDP(gross domestic product). On the other side of the view,few people think that financial assistance is essential ,but
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 more practical and good advice
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 more dominant
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 those
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.Many less developed countries are facing consequences in cyber attacks,terrorism and reduced health standards.
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the community,so foreign giant organizations should provide good guidance and practical help to those counterpart provinces.
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 leads to a positive environment and it assists them to live in a joyful and cheerful way.
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,from my point of view financial support is very fundamental to less developing countries from international
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.
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 is not only used for creating jobs for the youngsters in those
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 but
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local accommodations.
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,education plays a prominent role across the world,if we have
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 and it would be brought a huge number of job opportunities to
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 counterpart states.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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