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In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crimes, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

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Nowadays improved technology has been very helpful for urban
cities
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.some
cities
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 has been install video camera surveillance around the
street
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.
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, It has more benefits but some
people
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 thought it controls our own privacy. In the paragraph let's discuss it.  First of all , It's bring many advantages to human. If the criminal does any suspicious activity
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 they will catch it by
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 day or night time.
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, Shops all protect from robbery. Most
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' accidents are recorded by
street
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 view surveillance
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.so we can collect the evidence from there.It is easy to catch hit-and-run motorists. Now every ATM have been safe because of video
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. In individual houses
people
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 when left for vacation , are worried about their money and jewellery. If they activate the CCTV , they can enjoy the vacation without worries. On another hand,
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 it has many benefits some
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 think it controlled their privacy.when walking on the
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 they are monitored by watching lenses.It has very uncomfortable for them. They can not be crowded in the same place as their friends. Almost
cameras
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 watching them in the
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 so they are lost their freedom.
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 , If they are talking with their friends in
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 for more than a few hours surely the police would come and
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 ask the reason for the gathering. In conclusion , It has lost some freedom but
people
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 should be thinking safe environment for everyone.In my point of view ,it is very important for developed
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' safety.
people
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 must support for the government to install CCTV on
street
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