The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar canes. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram
give
the information about Change the verb form
gives
whole
production Add an article
the whole
process
of Use synonyms
sugar
from Use synonyms
sugar
cane.
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Overall
, Linking Words
it is clear that
there are totalLinking Words
7
steps to make Change preposition
of 7
sugar
from raw materials. Use synonyms
In addition
, in the manufacturing Linking Words
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process
the form of Add a comma
,process
sugar
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canes
turn into Fix the agreement mistake
cane
juice
and syrup.
Before the Use synonyms
process
begins, Use synonyms
sugar
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canes
are grown by farmers. It normally takes 12 to 18 months to be fully Fix the agreement mistake
cane
growned
. When they are ready to be harvested, the farmers start to work on gathering Correct your spelling
grown
sugar
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canes
either using machines or using handy tools. Use synonyms
Next,
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sugar
Use synonyms
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canes
are crushed into sweet Fix the agreement mistake
cane
juice
with a huge Use synonyms
juice
maker.
After sugary Use synonyms
juice
is made, it needs to be purified by Use synonyms
limestone
filter in order to get rid of impurities like Correct article usage
a limestone
dirts
. Pure Change the wording
dirt
specks of dirt
juice
is put into an evaporator which is heated by fire to make syrup. Use synonyms
The next step is
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centrifuge
Correct article usage
the centrifuge
process
, which separates Use synonyms
sugar
crystals from the syrup. Separated Use synonyms
sugar
powders are dried and cooled in the final step, they are Use synonyms
finally
ready to be sold.Linking Words
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, sugar, canes, juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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